New Work

The resident Mad Scientist has a great deal of feedback on the Trouble in Paradise piece.

1) Present tense is distracting and doesn't contribute.

2) Tighten tighten tighten. Chop the opening and move the "something wrong with brother" bit along faster.

3) "personal life bleed over" statement . Ditch.

4) Remove 2/3 of the speech attributions. Look at best selling pulp - they use virtually none and the readers can figure it out ...

5) Tighten tighten tighten.

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So , we're at work now on a slightly different diversion. It came to us on the spur disturbing the process of "legions in space."

The work will be patterned after my daughters. They have complained about the "mad scientist for a father" routine and the "cyborg beagle" we have as a pet. What can I say? I needed a subject for the bio-mechanical interface trial and the beagle was available. The daughters weren't home.

So, a story about what it is to be a freshmen with .... a mad scientist in the family. (That's mad scientist ...not evil overlord tyrant. Those are folks who fund our work on occasion.)