Thursday, November 15, 2007

Wrong Way , asshole

Kay through 12 has real merit. It does however need a better voice, better execution, an a better opening.

I can feel this one.

Now, I swear I'm not going to let it go all balls up into the shit can.

1) Kay though 12 is book for adults in commercial literature with a protagonist who happens to be a freshman girl.

2) The protagonist is not a conformal or expected characterization of a freshman girl ...rather she is a satirical realist who has the observation powers of a fully formed and mature mind but whose temporal age is that of a freshman.

3) The conflicts need to reflect mature themes ...why read a story about a kid and homework. Let's read a story not about fantastical evil mad scientists doing brain experiments ...but truly unpleasant and non-comical evil mad scientists doing scary brain experiments ....

4) The universe I create is a character in the story. Sure. But the character roster needs to work. Make a model ...build on it.

5) First person omniscient works as long as the reader can perceive in this story the two characters of Kay ... the Kay whose voice and speech is the freshman girl because ... she is physically expected to be a freshman girl AND the omniscient depiction of Kay in the first person narrative who is darker, more mature, and perhaps a touch sad.

What is the language ... does it reflect the mood, does it drive the plot, does provide and illustration in the nature of conflict ...

We're not writing about egg timers ...we're controlling brains and ripping psyche's apart ... sometimes, there is no happy ending. Kill a couple well loved characters ..paint it black. Let Kay emerge to the reader as grounded in chaos and at home among the murderers and despots of the world.

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